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Here are a few sentences from a WIP
A young thief, Ethan James, gets more than he bargained for after stealing a priceless relic. He is forced to work with Ash Stephanos, an expert on Egyptian antiquities, to free himself from the grasp of a vindictive ancient God.
“Zephyr,” Ash whispered as he stepped outside, the curtains billowing around him. Scented oil from the hanging brass lanterns teased his senses, flickering flames danced in the breeze. The moon cast a soft glow as he walked the familiar path to the beach and dug his bare toes into the cool wet sand. Like so many nights before, he looked to the east towards the land of his birth. “Just a glimpse,” he said to himself in vain. A sad laugh bubbled from his lips. Even he was incapable of seeing across the Mediterranean.
I get a sense of sadness and loneliness in this snippet, along with homesickness.
ReplyDeleteYes, very much so. Thank you for reading.
DeleteI loved the description in this and the premise is intriguing.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteI can feel the longing. Lovely snip! :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteThe premise of this is really intriguing!
ReplyDeleteThanks. We think it's a great story, but we are biased.
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